where do i even begin? with the small things first i suppose.
the sistar cameo ;-; my goodness. idk if maybe i didn't read slow enough in my excitement but i didn't catch who the groom was or if he was ever mentioned at all. all i know is that yum, hyorin in red? hell to the frick yes.
the precious yadong. be still my heart. they're another otp. their bromance is the stuff of gold and the way you played it out was really just stunning. it was kinda thrust in there at first and the natural procession with which you had him kinda webbing in and out of dongwoo's conscious was really well done. the line about his sexuality was gold! it's just one of those lines that fits perfectly and it has this ring or flow to it that just makes it really fun even though it's just a sentence :/
sungjong and sungyeol were lovely. they were really nice additions because it might have felt just a bit too overbearing to have nothing but woohyun and dongwoo interacting nonstop during the whole of the fic. they provided really good relief and you used them really efficiently to foreshadow hoya from dongwoo's past without being too obvious all in one go and just spilling it all out.
woohyun!! you wrote him perfectly. i think this captures him down to a T with how he is most a charming guy who can woo the pants right off of you but he has sweet little tidbits in him that pretty much allow you to let him have his way. he was a perfecly well rounded character and while we only got so much history on his side, it worked perfectly and it was a really good balance between what was going on and the bits of information he gave dongwoo. he never gave more than he got and sometimes he didn't give at all lol.
dongwoo, what utter perfection. i saw you write in the meme that you weren't all that used to him perhaps but i feel like you captured certain parts of his personality really well. he is a delicate little thing and he tends to keep to himself unless he is forced out or grows into it but you managed to keep that little guarded bit of him up even to the very end and it was just stunning. i love love love how you did that. dongwo didn't change from the first sentence all the way down to teh very last word. that alone was really amazing and it made him seem a really fleshed out character that we can really think so much about when all we know about him is a bad break up and bits and pieces of his day to day life. he was just really wonderful and with him being my bias, i can freely say that you did an amazing job with him and he is divine in here.
one thing that i was driving myself crazy with here was how you never strayed from dongwoo. i tend to have lots of problems keeping to a 3rd person poc but keeping it to the pov of one person like how you did here, so i was being mind boggled the whole time. it's a simple thing but it's hard for me so just know that i was smiling and loving your writing style and how you worded certain things loads.
the actual suits bit. you really went to town on your research and it shows, dear lawd. it was perfect. this was an au i had been saving for myself to write down the line but i am so happy i gave it to you instead. i wouldn't have been able to do a quarter as good a job as you did with this here. i was feeling horrible but then i was all "idc, at least it's written wonderfully". just... i can't even B| the actual terminology and how you went about things. it felt perfectly routine and natural so it only added to their interactions and made the fic that much better.
i'll stop now but i could go on for ages ;-; DON'T EVEN GET ME STARTED ON YOUR COMMAS. i was frothing at the mouth with how huge a whore i am with commas.
thank you so much for doing this. i don't even know what the frick i was doing on my first day back in the memes but i am so happy i chanced upon it and happened to stumble into you.
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with the small things first i suppose.
the sistar cameo ;-; my goodness. idk if maybe i didn't read slow enough in my excitement but i didn't catch who the groom was or if he was ever mentioned at all. all i know is that yum, hyorin in red? hell to the frick yes.
the precious yadong. be still my heart. they're another otp. their bromance is the stuff of gold and the way you played it out was really just stunning. it was kinda thrust in there at first and the natural procession with which you had him kinda webbing in and out of dongwoo's conscious was really well done. the line about his sexuality was gold! it's just one of those lines that fits perfectly and it has this ring or flow to it that just makes it really fun even though it's just a sentence :/
sungjong and sungyeol were lovely. they were really nice additions because it might have felt just a bit too overbearing to have nothing but woohyun and dongwoo interacting nonstop during the whole of the fic. they provided really good relief and you used them really efficiently to foreshadow hoya from dongwoo's past without being too obvious all in one go and just spilling it all out.
woohyun!! you wrote him perfectly. i think this captures him down to a T with how he is most a charming guy who can woo the pants right off of you but he has sweet little tidbits in him that pretty much allow you to let him have his way. he was a perfecly well rounded character and while we only got so much history on his side, it worked perfectly and it was a really good balance between what was going on and the bits of information he gave dongwoo. he never gave more than he got and sometimes he didn't give at all lol.
dongwoo, what utter perfection. i saw you write in the meme that you weren't all that used to him perhaps but i feel like you captured certain parts of his personality really well. he is a delicate little thing and he tends to keep to himself unless he is forced out or grows into it but you managed to keep that little guarded bit of him up even to the very end and it was just stunning. i love love love how you did that. dongwo didn't change from the first sentence all the way down to teh very last word. that alone was really amazing and it made him seem a really fleshed out character that we can really think so much about when all we know about him is a bad break up and bits and pieces of his day to day life. he was just really wonderful and with him being my bias, i can freely say that you did an amazing job with him and he is divine in here.
one thing that i was driving myself crazy with here was how you never strayed from dongwoo. i tend to have lots of problems keeping to a 3rd person poc but keeping it to the pov of one person like how you did here, so i was being mind boggled the whole time. it's a simple thing but it's hard for me so just know that i was smiling and loving your writing style and how you worded certain things loads.
the actual suits bit. you really went to town on your research and it shows, dear lawd. it was perfect. this was an au i had been saving for myself to write down the line but i am so happy i gave it to you instead. i wouldn't have been able to do a quarter as good a job as you did with this here. i was feeling horrible but then i was all "idc, at least it's written wonderfully". just... i can't even B| the actual terminology and how you went about things. it felt perfectly routine and natural so it only added to their interactions and made the fic that much better.
i'll stop now but i could go on for ages ;-; DON'T EVEN GET ME STARTED ON YOUR COMMAS. i was frothing at the mouth with how huge a whore i am with commas.
thank you so much for doing this. i don't even know what the frick i was doing on my first day back in the memes but i am so happy i chanced upon it and happened to stumble into you.
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